Swirl

[Chello]

Swirl
Topsy, terby
Ready to fall
The room spins
And I can't find a wall
It's like a treadmill
Faster than life
the way this world moves
So different from right..
I can hear my thoughts
Inside my head,
Guiding the path
That leads the way.
In your head
the greatest trip
Delayed by the fog
Lost in Numb

[FIRE!!!]

A little bit simple. Not too much substance to it, didn't really send a powerful message across. Sorry if that sounds harsh but I'm giving an honest opinion. It wasn't a bad poem, just didn't strike me as a particularly powerful one.

[themagicbus]

critisism from the guy who listens to lil wayne?? HA