Wrote ballad for eng, "15 year old prostitute".

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Wrote ballad for eng, "15 year old prostitute".

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This is like a 10 minute draft, gimme some tips to improve on it. Please? :P

I was supposed to take a news story and write about it.












Getting ready for another night of hard work.
Gotta get drunk first.
Need money to pay the rent, but I don't got the guts to do this sober.
Polished off that mickey nice and quick, that quenched my thirst!
It's hard living alone.

But I'm not totally alone.
I got my childhood friend selling out her body right along with me.
We're tag team hookers; scum of the earth, but hey..
At least we're making some money.
The alcohol sets in.

Staggering down the sidewalk, dont got much to say about much.
Just heading from Point A to B, destination Main Street.
More business, more degenerates (like me) in that area
Pretty much feeling used and still sore from my last venture out, what a treat.
The income I'll make out of this should be worth it?

I made it, I'm here, fantastic, wow..
Need to start animating myself to lure in potential customers.
"Hey, I'm available if you wanna pay the price!" I yell.
No go, he wasn't interested but whatever, the night isn't over.
He's a loser anyway, that's right.

My friend thinks she can see a cop approaching.
Just look normal, I hate pigs so much.
All they do is add on unecessary heat to my profession.
They're slowing down now, they're such.....
Can't even put a proper insult for them into words.

In conclusion, we got arrested.
Oh well.
Don't care.
Kill myself and go to hell.
Nothing matters anyway, HA!
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Post by bonbon »

if i wrote that i would really keep saying how much scum she is and all that...like when you say "We're tag team hookers; scum of the earth"
and "more degenerates (like me)"... cuz they really dont care what people think about them or anything....they are just there for the money...so they really dont label themselves cuz they really have no reason to... but hey thats just my opinion and your essay...
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bonbon wrote:if i wrote that i would really keep saying how much scum she is and all that...like when you say "We're tag team hookers; scum of the earth"
and "more degenerates (like me)"... cuz they really dont care what people think about them or anything....they are just there for the money...so they really dont label themselves cuz they really have no reason to... but hey thats just my opinion and your essay...
Most people I know in this scene (crackheads, fuckups, etc) think pretty lowly of themselves. Beat themselves up endlessly. :?

Thx for the advice tho. :D
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Post by Gorecore »

Makes me think about one of my favorite Gwar songs called:

Pre Skool Prostitute

I saw a friend just the other day
he didn't have too much to say
He looked crazy, he looked insane
He couldn't talk because his tongue was inflamed
And then he tried to run away
From some chick that was coming this way
I think I thought I knew who she was
A little junkie whore that's a big ugly scuz

I didn't have to go to far
Flashed 20 bucks and then she got in the car
Tried to talk to her but she called me a fool
I tried to give her money and put her family through school
Cause she's a real tough mama when she wear's women's clothes
Everybody knows she she's got a bone through her nose
She's really hot, he's hawking snot
But when she gets home Daddies all over her twat

Pre sckool prostitute
All the drugs that you can shoot
Pre School prostitute
Slave to the brute

I finally gave up, let her do what she please
Wouldn't have sex with her cause I got a disease
But she told a sad story 'bout a family in woe
She was getting fingered by her Daddies big toe
He was the first. It was the worst
She came in a limo and she left in a hearse
She became five. She's still alive
Better call the bug man cause your twat is a hive

Preschool Prostitute
All the drugs that you can shoot
Preschool Prostitute
Tried to talk to her but she called me a fool
I tried to give her money and put her family through school
She's a real tough mama and she wear's women's clothes
Everybody knows she she's got a bone through her nose
You're barely out of diapers and you're wearing a wig
You might be a baby but you smell like a pig
She got to five she's still alive
better call the bugman cause your twat is a hive.
A naughty nanny
Your grumpy Granny
A rusty tire iron hanging out her fanny
Oh, you little English schoolgirl you
Vengeance is mine
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Post by hubcap »

fuck that takes me back :P haven't heard that song in a while.
Try some wrong
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Post by Rory »

Reminds me of Preteen Deathfuck by Nattefrost ;)

YOU CAN SCREAM ALL YOU WANT
YOU CAN SCREAM ALL YOU WANT
YOU CAN SCREAM ALL YOU WANT
UUUUUGHHHHHH
PRETEEN DEATHFUCK!!
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Post by President Beavis »

^^Last 3 posts.

Really helpful, thx dudez! :lol:

I hate having to write shit for english. Can't fuck around at all... gotta be all serious... fuck.... fuck. :evil:
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