Drifting Alone

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Zen
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Drifting Alone

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A drift at sea, the cold ocean cradles
Floating, with the tides and the currents
Looking up to see, circles of seagulls
Nothing anywhere to see, silent disturbances

The ship that was sailing, seems to have sunk
Left us all to swim or to drown
This world of blue, claims another lil punk
Insanities raining fast down

Where did the past go to
Running away from the futures shiny glow
To this hole far from view
Hiding in the security of not what it doesn't know

Paranoia and unreason pick up their cups
They've come for the party of tea for three
They buzz as they cheers and tip their tops
Laughing as pools of tears melt into the sea

Lost, and loosing to the forces of the moon
The shore was never insight, less need for an anchor
The sky creates a ceiling, hearing the wind's tune
Ocean and air blues, the walls fade into nothing more

Fish telling me I can swim and breathe
Notions of flight flitter from the birds
Does it makes sense now why these legs have ceased
And this gaping mouth, leaking all its words,
Seems pleased, at loosing all it's senses.




Peace~
Use the Earth to sew...
Use the Water to grow...
Use your hands to pick...
Your fingers to pack...
Use the Fire to burn...
Use the Air to breathe...
AND TOKE THAT SH!T LIKE A MUTHA FUCKIN' CYCLONE!!!

-Derekson
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Post by greenteam »

beautiful mind man... I feel like I can relate to that on a spiritual level and I'm really diggin the use of tension and release coupled with a very sensory experience

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Post by Zen »

Hey Thanks Green, although i'm sure I know what you mean by tension and release, but... Was is any certain lines or did you mean the piece in general and as a whole from start to finish... starting tense and then releasing the tension by the end?

Peace~
Use the Earth to sew...
Use the Water to grow...
Use your hands to pick...
Your fingers to pack...
Use the Fire to burn...
Use the Air to breathe...
AND TOKE THAT SH!T LIKE A MUTHA FUCKIN' CYCLONE!!!

-Derekson
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